Here is my mix of the song....
- Piano sound is really honky. Too much upper midrange.
- Vocals are harsh. This is a quality of the entire mix.
- The entire mix has this huge hump in the upper midrange. It sounds really harsh.
+ Balance and panning is good.
+ Reverbs are great choice.
+ Dynamics are really good.
I agree with Amphibians comments
Thanks for the comments... Here is a revision taking your suggestions into account.