First mix (v1) is much better for me than the 2nd. The bass and vocals are much cleaner. It's in pretty good shape and for me just maybe needs a touch of polish here and there really.
Some thoughts and ideas that may or may not be of any use:
Rain track - Personally I'd cut it just before the first kick at 8secs to give the kick more impact. I don't think it needs to be playing after that.
Bass - Could maybe control the low end just a touch with a multiband compressor. Not by much, just a touch to keep it in check with one band set for something like 200Hz and below. It will also make the midrange seem a bit cleaner too. It's about where it should be but needs controlling a little.
Intro synth - This is hitting quite well. Might want to try adding just a touch of width to it with a widener, just to get it slightly outside the speakers. This will also open up the middle of the track just a little for the vocal to sit.
Other elements, guitar, etc - As well as adding a bit of widening, maybe try adding a db or so of somewhere between 4-8k with a wide filter to bring things foward a little in the mix too here and there where you feel it might need it.
Vocal - For me the vocal is just behind the synth, but needs to be in front of it. You could boost the volume just a touch and maybe add a touch more presence, maybe a db somewhere between 3 to 6k ish to make it pop out a touch. Might also need just a hint more plate reverb or something too. I think I sidechained the synth to the vocal so it ducks automatically only about a db or 2 when the vocal comes in. You could also tuck in a very short delay underneath it too (no feedback, just 30ms one side and 40ms the other, or something along those lines). Nothing drastic, just needs a little lift, experiment a bit and see what works.
kick/snare - parallel compress with 1176 and blend in for a little lift?
Final limiter - You can hit it a bit with a final brick wall limiter which for me I think does help give this kind of stuff 'that sound' a little. No need to go crazy. Commercial mixes still get to around 6-7 LUFS still I think. Somewhere around 9ish should sound ok I reckon. You'll also notice if any element is a bit hot and is distorting a bit too early too, once you limit it a bit.
Let me know if thats ok and the kind of thing you are after (or not!) , or if there is anything specific you are wanting help with.
Cheers!
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