So, here's my mix with a quick (and slightly over compressed) master.

[crissmichaels]

So, after tweaking a few things on this mix, I played it on the stereo system in my living room. It sounds like I fixed the issues I had in both mixes. Not only that, I want to say what an excellent performance this is. I got goosebumps where the last chorus comes in from just the synth

Let me know what you think!