Love the egtr tone and punchy drums. vox sounds good too although i think the fx could be dialed back a smidge....its making the vox a wee bit sibilant and artifact sounding.
The overall mix is probably a bit light in the low end/low mids (100-500hz). Maybe you can fix with a master buss happy face eq or you may need to dive back in and push up the bass/add beef to acugtr for example...but avoid adding back any sub 100 hz mud to mid range instruments.
keep it up!
Be fierce in your encouragement, kind in your criticism and try and remember that the art of a good critique is not to make someone else's mix sound like yours...but to help the mixer realize their own vision.
Version 2 sounds much better with more bass and less reverb, Can hear a little mid bass build up of frequencies ,Maybe try muting and unmuting things like the electric guitar and bass to hear what helps the mix sounds cleaner in the mid bass. For example I may have gone too far and ended up rolling off some the low frequencies of the some of the electric guitars as high as 200hz.
Well Done