Second try

[okonuk]

I think this mix needs some subtractive EQ. Start with cutting some flappy mid range yuck in the kick, some mid frequencies in the vocals, and some tight notches to get rid of some harsh frequencies in the OH/cymbals. The toms also cut have a ton of knocky mids cut out.

I also think the reverb you put on snare and toms (it sounds like) is a bit much. Just bring it down a tad, the snare needs to be more in your face.

Hope that helps!