My first attempt.

[Mixinthecloud]

I think you've done an admiral job with the drums, although I do not share your characterization of the drum recording. Not sold on the vocal reverb. Takes away to much of the quality of the vocal and forces attention on the effects trail, which I think is unwarranted for this performance. I also think you might want to be a bit more dynamic with the guitar parts against the vocal. Those parts are tending to get lost in parts and there seems to be a whole lot of space available to bring them into better focus during the song. They don't seems to share the dynamic power of the song when I think they should participate more according to the emotions of the song. Your sounds are excellent and over-all this is very enjoyable.