21-04-2015, 07:26 PM
Hi Oakoak,
I really like the direction that you took the track overall. I think that for the most part, your handling of the instruments was well balanced and the mood is really good.
In terms of feedback, the things that stood out for me, instrumentation wise, were as follows:
1) Where there were 2 bass parts playing at once, the bass, for me anyway, got a bit too heavy and muddy. I think I get what you were trying to achieve here but I think it needs to be reigned in a bit.
2) The heavily distorted guitars in the last part need some treatment as in the mix, they sound a bit harsh. It doesn't fit with the rest of the sound palette that you have created.
3) The bell has slightly too much high end for my tastes.
4) Sounds like some gating is necessary in some of the noisier guitar parts at the end (probably the feedback guitars) as there are some (minor though it may be) unpleasant low end buzzing sounds coming from this section.
I feel that the part of the mix that needs the most attention is the vocals (though I guess this is what you wanted to go back to do with compression and automation):
1) The quiet parts (from start to about 1:00 for instance) are a bit too soft. I get that you wanted an intimate vibe here but my personal view is that listeners attach themselves to the vocals of any song and at times you are asking too much of them to try and pick out the words.
2) The loud parts (from around 1:23 to around 1:46) are a bit too loud. They stand out from the rest of the mix too much. It sounds like you've cut a decent amount of space for them down the middle so dropping the levels a bit shouldn't bury the vocals.
3) In contrast to the above 2 points, at 3:47 or so (and for the rest of that last part of the song), where you'd expect his vocals to really come alive, they sound really buried.
4) The vocals, to me, sound like they have too much mid-low end. Most noticeable in the "big" last section with everything going on at once. It sounds like it is overlapping other instruments a bit. It's possible that other instruments are also responsible for the bit of muddiness that is happening here.
Good job in general. Thanks for sharing your work
I really like the direction that you took the track overall. I think that for the most part, your handling of the instruments was well balanced and the mood is really good.
In terms of feedback, the things that stood out for me, instrumentation wise, were as follows:
1) Where there were 2 bass parts playing at once, the bass, for me anyway, got a bit too heavy and muddy. I think I get what you were trying to achieve here but I think it needs to be reigned in a bit.
2) The heavily distorted guitars in the last part need some treatment as in the mix, they sound a bit harsh. It doesn't fit with the rest of the sound palette that you have created.
3) The bell has slightly too much high end for my tastes.
4) Sounds like some gating is necessary in some of the noisier guitar parts at the end (probably the feedback guitars) as there are some (minor though it may be) unpleasant low end buzzing sounds coming from this section.
I feel that the part of the mix that needs the most attention is the vocals (though I guess this is what you wanted to go back to do with compression and automation):
1) The quiet parts (from start to about 1:00 for instance) are a bit too soft. I get that you wanted an intimate vibe here but my personal view is that listeners attach themselves to the vocals of any song and at times you are asking too much of them to try and pick out the words.
2) The loud parts (from around 1:23 to around 1:46) are a bit too loud. They stand out from the rest of the mix too much. It sounds like you've cut a decent amount of space for them down the middle so dropping the levels a bit shouldn't bury the vocals.
3) In contrast to the above 2 points, at 3:47 or so (and for the rest of that last part of the song), where you'd expect his vocals to really come alive, they sound really buried.
4) The vocals, to me, sound like they have too much mid-low end. Most noticeable in the "big" last section with everything going on at once. It sounds like it is overlapping other instruments a bit. It's possible that other instruments are also responsible for the bit of muddiness that is happening here.
Good job in general. Thanks for sharing your work