Hi jack
I like your mix and impressed you picked a challenging for your first post.
The Balance with the kick and bass is a good challenge depending on what you are using as monitors ,I can hear on the sub ,the kick has a lot of 50 hz thump and competing with bass maybe in the 50-100hz adjusting this area should give the bass more room the shine .
I found the vocals and instruments eq in the 200-400hz and and 2-4k are are a tricky area to give then their own space.
I like your mix and impressed you picked a challenging for your first post.
The Balance with the kick and bass is a good challenge depending on what you are using as monitors ,I can hear on the sub ,the kick has a lot of 50 hz thump and competing with bass maybe in the 50-100hz adjusting this area should give the bass more room the shine .
I found the vocals and instruments eq in the 200-400hz and and 2-4k are are a tricky area to give then their own space.