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[Mike_K]

...sibilance is a [major] problem....the mike is causing other issues too, one is the proximity which then makes it difficult to place in the mix depth-wise, the other is the tonal variations and balance...

Hey, whatever doesn't kill you... :^) I learned some ways to tame a 57... --Unless Patrick tells me I destroyed his voice... in which case it's back to the drawing board... :^\
My main problem was the splattering on some esses (S's?) "Scarlet dreSS" in V1; "SHee floats around" in B1... Miking the corner of the mouth might fix it...

... i like Patrick's vocal character, it deserves a far better mike

I totally agree. There are some good inexpensive mic options these days.

...Personally, from a Producer's perspective, i'd like to have some double-tracking to work with, i think this would add some synergy to the song.

I don't know about THIS song, but a dbl track is sometimes nice to have. Nothing like it...

i don't know if Patrick used headphones during tracking, but i'd recommend a review of strategy, because it might be contributing to his challenge remaining in key

I think my only real pitch problems were towards the ends of phrases. I'd recommend breathing deeper! :^)