Okay, I remember attempting to mix this once or twice and never came up with anything I really liked so I have a slight remembrance of how the individual tracks sound.
With that being said the first thing I really noticed was something that I feel almost needs to be done with this track. In this piece the kick almost has to give a slight pump to it for it sound correct. It just doesn't sound like that is going on at all. Further, the bass sound itself is quite weak and anemic in comparison to the kick. This leaves a couple of choices, either try to make the bass stronger or just let the kick rule the track. Also, the bass gets kind of buried in the mix later on.
Next thing I really noticed is the distortion especially around 2:45. At first I noticed on the background vox and I'm not entirely sure what is causing it. Sounds almost intentional. If so then I think it ought to be backed down a couple of notches. It is simply a bit too much. If unintentional then I really don't have much of a thought as to what is causing it other than clipping the codec, but you have to be really pushing it for that happen to this degree.
Then came the guitars. Really they're just not that interesting in this particular mix. They're just there for the sake of being there. Towards the end of the track they really take it into their own and should be really focused on IMO. I'd also would have to liked to hear some more depth in the piece as a whole. Really kind of layering things behind the front lead instruments. Just creating more "texture". Another thing I remember from the individual tracks is the ability to really take those guitars and make them huge. As it sounds you kept them pretty much in the center which I feel takes away from a great tool you've got to make an interesting mix. To a degree it sounds like you pushed the vocals out to the sides a bit more, but it just doesn't do it for me.
All in all an okay mix. Has some issues, but overall not too terrible I think.
With that being said the first thing I really noticed was something that I feel almost needs to be done with this track. In this piece the kick almost has to give a slight pump to it for it sound correct. It just doesn't sound like that is going on at all. Further, the bass sound itself is quite weak and anemic in comparison to the kick. This leaves a couple of choices, either try to make the bass stronger or just let the kick rule the track. Also, the bass gets kind of buried in the mix later on.
Next thing I really noticed is the distortion especially around 2:45. At first I noticed on the background vox and I'm not entirely sure what is causing it. Sounds almost intentional. If so then I think it ought to be backed down a couple of notches. It is simply a bit too much. If unintentional then I really don't have much of a thought as to what is causing it other than clipping the codec, but you have to be really pushing it for that happen to this degree.
Then came the guitars. Really they're just not that interesting in this particular mix. They're just there for the sake of being there. Towards the end of the track they really take it into their own and should be really focused on IMO. I'd also would have to liked to hear some more depth in the piece as a whole. Really kind of layering things behind the front lead instruments. Just creating more "texture". Another thing I remember from the individual tracks is the ability to really take those guitars and make them huge. As it sounds you kept them pretty much in the center which I feel takes away from a great tool you've got to make an interesting mix. To a degree it sounds like you pushed the vocals out to the sides a bit more, but it just doesn't do it for me.
All in all an okay mix. Has some issues, but overall not too terrible I think.