Compared with Deny Control, this mix sounds small and tiny. Can`t pinpoint it, really, but the guitars sound harsh, and I miss dynamics and movement. It could be that the distortion/compression that helped bring out the energy and emotion in Deny Control is causing the problem and that this song needs a much cleaner approach and less distortion/compression/limiting on the master buss.
The result is a mix that has the same "energy" from start to end. The song itself gives plenty of opportunities to go from low to high energy. Some parts need to be smaller than the rest (e.g. the bridge), and some louder. If the snare in the bridge has the same sound and energy in the verse, bridge and chorus, something is wrong. E.g. the bridge needs to be small, fragile, like it could break at any moment. That`s something I miss in your version. The problem is that the buildup loses much of its energy because the bridge has the same energy level as the verse and chorus before.
The result is a mix that has the same "energy" from start to end. The song itself gives plenty of opportunities to go from low to high energy. Some parts need to be smaller than the rest (e.g. the bridge), and some louder. If the snare in the bridge has the same sound and energy in the verse, bridge and chorus, something is wrong. E.g. the bridge needs to be small, fragile, like it could break at any moment. That`s something I miss in your version. The problem is that the buildup loses much of its energy because the bridge has the same energy level as the verse and chorus before.