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- Kick is too big and wooffy ... not enough punch for me. Although this was a tough track to get right.
- Rhythm section could come up a bit, and maybe cut the reverb a touch.
- Vocal tone is good, but automate the volume in the last chorus. It gets a bit lost.
- BGV could be featured a bit more, with some width for more interest.
- I like the lead break.
- Bass guitar could also provide some punch, but needs to work with the difficult kick.
The overall mix just seems to be washed in a bit too much reverb effect and lacks a bit of punch.
Great start though.
Cheers ... Perry
Didn't personally think the song fitted too punchy a sound, so was kinda going for a rounded smoothish sound, but tweaked a few bits mainly kick and reverb.
Will work on it a little more before i do an update!