I think that those couple of sentences that start at 1:50 would need to be just a little bit louder.
I also noticed something strange in the sound of the kick. Just the other day I read Mike's advice on this track and he mentioned that he had to trigger a kick sample here; and another one for the snare too.
I hope I could help you. I'll check out again when the mix is finished
Sounds like a real challenge !
I like your kick ! If I should mix this I would build around the kick, as its one o the few things apart from pads playin all the time. The bass stick out a bit on the deep notes, at least on my speakers.
The synth sounding voices (vocoder) are a bit harsh to me, but then again, it sounds like a real challenge to glue all these parts together an make it shine. Im not sure I understand the arrangement and had i arranged the song there would definetily be more guitar than synths :-)
Im not afraid of rearrangin these songs and actually it would be fun to work with this one, see what i come up wit.
Hope you can use my input, a unclear and spontaneus as it is.
Great kick sound !
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