Hi Eric, it was a while since you posted this. I think if You go back and listen now you'll hear the kick is not very good sounds ehh little puffy if you know what I mean :-). Need some work on that but good mix apart from the kick.
An old thread, whatever, I just passed your version
Not bad, not bad at all
Don't think the kick is too puffy (in my opinion), many times the kick in metal is too much in the front and sounds like smashing a drumstick on a high pressure skippy ball....
You have created diversity in this mix and thats harsh to realize while the nature of metal is not too much dynamics and you managed it though