Set me free, first mix

[foo727]

Hi all,

here is my version of this cool groovy song.
Let me know what you think about it !

[Mixinthecloud]

Some really cool stuff here. I like what you did with the voice and the horns. The shaker sounds awesome too! LOL
Somehow it is not quite jelling as a whole song yet. It seems a bit disjointed almost like you wrote a sentence but didn't quite finish it yet.
Could I say this is a good start without offending?