I really like it. I'm missing the bass guitar. I think it plays an important part.
I think you have a good grasp of the dynamics. I think the focus is more on the chorus as opposed to the verse. It's rambunctious. But I want to say 'immature'. It's the closest approach to the song I've felt. What comes across is accentuating the chorus and I think the verse can have as much focus. Almost as if the verse is a 'break' from having to deal with the chorus.
I'm not being helpful. I'm sure. I really like this approach and the dynamics and I'm poorly expressing what it needs. I don't want to say it should be less dynamic. The chorus might be oversaturated and trying too hard.
I think the verses need 'more'. More savory? The chorus feels like candy as opposed to an awesome pastry.
I'm bad at critique. I only try to explain it because I think you understand what it needs, it's maybe my favorite version, and I like where you're going and maybe trying too much to help.
Feel free to ask for clarification. Good work.
I think you have a good grasp of the dynamics. I think the focus is more on the chorus as opposed to the verse. It's rambunctious. But I want to say 'immature'. It's the closest approach to the song I've felt. What comes across is accentuating the chorus and I think the verse can have as much focus. Almost as if the verse is a 'break' from having to deal with the chorus.
I'm not being helpful. I'm sure. I really like this approach and the dynamics and I'm poorly expressing what it needs. I don't want to say it should be less dynamic. The chorus might be oversaturated and trying too hard.
I think the verses need 'more'. More savory? The chorus feels like candy as opposed to an awesome pastry.
I'm bad at critique. I only try to explain it because I think you understand what it needs, it's maybe my favorite version, and I like where you're going and maybe trying too much to help.
Feel free to ask for clarification. Good work.
It doesn't have to sound good. People just need to think it sounds good.