13-03-2019, 04:44 PM
Cool trick with the last line! I really liked the sound and arrangement of the choruses. Drums might be a little too loud in the second and third, making the track look a little emptier than it is, but we're talking decimals here. Really dig it.
The last vocal "delay" line (you know, the "never come"s, "come and gone/undone"?s) in the first refrain (the one by the lead) are the only thing I'd revisit in an otherwise very interesting, very personal approach (it made me fancy watching "Gravity"). I can't tell if it's because the line is one too many, or maybe it's it being cleaner and more present than the inmediate previous repetition (the one sang by the BVs), or maybe all it needs is some stronger reverb.
I'm not so sure with the verses, thou. Too light against the dense refrains, I understand you're looking for contrast but the verses end up feeling... undercooked? (like too much tension release might be no better than no releasing at all) and then kinda too manipulated at the same time (chopping the beat in the second verse might get overdone after the first stop and dropping the piano in the middle eight feels too drastic, but then it's debatable if it makes sense to judge arrangement choices, since the expected audiences shouldn't know the raws like we do here).
What I think one can tell wheter you know or not the insides of the track, is that the choruses sound better in general, with punch and gravitas the verses have not, like it was 2 mixes edited together, if that makes sense to you?
The last vocal "delay" line (you know, the "never come"s, "come and gone/undone"?s) in the first refrain (the one by the lead) are the only thing I'd revisit in an otherwise very interesting, very personal approach (it made me fancy watching "Gravity"). I can't tell if it's because the line is one too many, or maybe it's it being cleaner and more present than the inmediate previous repetition (the one sang by the BVs), or maybe all it needs is some stronger reverb.
I'm not so sure with the verses, thou. Too light against the dense refrains, I understand you're looking for contrast but the verses end up feeling... undercooked? (like too much tension release might be no better than no releasing at all) and then kinda too manipulated at the same time (chopping the beat in the second verse might get overdone after the first stop and dropping the piano in the middle eight feels too drastic, but then it's debatable if it makes sense to judge arrangement choices, since the expected audiences shouldn't know the raws like we do here).
What I think one can tell wheter you know or not the insides of the track, is that the choruses sound better in general, with punch and gravitas the verses have not, like it was 2 mixes edited together, if that makes sense to you?