Dead Roses - mixed at The Shack

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Overall, the individual sounds are fine, however I feel you missed the mark a bit on the musicality of the approach. Things just seem a bit disjointed and the whole does not seems to make a song.
Sorry for the tough notes. Based on the quality of the sounds I bet you can do better. It does seems to come together a more towards the end of the song and your vocal treatments are pretty cool.