Nicely presented and excellent imaging. Not sure about the build out at the end. Some creative editing may have been more appropriate.
I'd be interested to know how this sounded to you on various playback systems.
This is another transient-rich, busy stereo delivery making it sound a little too chaotic, for me anyway. More focus on the sustained elements rather than the temporal ones would help me engage.
There are also suggestions of level balancing issues here too which could be addressed with good compression strategy to control or rather tame those sometimes erratic dynamics in the transients.